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The first draft of a science fantasy space opera. |
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I'm struggling with level of description here. I don't want to info-dump, but I want it to be obvious that this is a sci-fi with all the fun tech that comes with that. There's also aliens in this. I know what they look like, but I'm struggling with how and where to get that down on the page. Chapters Marked "Book One" are brand new, first draft, never reviewed, never rewritten. They're a possible new starting place for Capita. Chapters (tentatively) marked "Book Two" are the old Capita starting place which may logically become a second book, because this is obviously a series now.  General reviews of either are appreciated, but if you're looking for ideas to drill down, here are some questions/notes I'm currently asking myself: Book One Questions Whelp, here we are! I've taken the story back at least a year from the start and tentatively labelled it book one. It's complicated. As a reader and reviewer though, all you need to know is that this is probably now book one and should be considered the actual starting place for the series. This has only had one read-through before being put up for thoughts, so at the moment, I'm looking to see if this feels like a more natural starting place with a logical plot before delving into any of the nitty-gritty. If you've read "book two" or even the first chapter of "book two", I'd be intrigued to see your thoughts on where this is now, how far back I've gone and how it feels. If you're a fan of any characters or character relationships, you'll now get to see where they began in relation to Alexandra! So, yay? If you're reading any form of Capita for the first time, welcome! Book Two Questions I may take book two down from reviews shortly because it seems like I should finish the first before moving onto the second? But, whilst I'm still getting a handle on things, I'm leaving this up because some of the comments in reviews are what landed me where I am!  Each member of the crew bar Alexandra and Houdini are not human (although Houdini isn't your standard human either). Do I express this soon enough in the first chapters? When I do describe them, does it work? Is it info-dumpy? Does my description of Leo make sense (you'll know why I pick on him when you read it)?  Near the very beginning of the story, The Nyx docks on Plartelov station. Would it break things up more to have the crew disembark and spend a chapter or so on the station? Just to get some space from being on the ship the whole time?  Do the characters have distinct voices? I'm leaning towards not quite... ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** |
| Book One: Chapter One | 7.21k | ||
| Book One: Chapter Two | 8.97k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter One | 12.20k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Two | 10.97k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Three | 9.02k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Four | 9.39k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Five | 11.17k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Six | 8.80k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Seven | 13.11k | ||
| Book Two: Chapter Eight | 6.05k |
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