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Given: Sep 15, 2011 at 1:21am
Length: 1,132 Characters |
794 w/o WritingML
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** I am reviewing as part of the Simply Positive Review team. I offer my opinion based on my limited experience. It is only one in a world of opinions and yours to use or ignore.
Overall Impression:
I can clearly understand the feelings in this poem, and the content fits the title.
What I like:
The abab rhyme scheme is consistent throughout. The sonnet form is totally appropriate to the title.
Problems and suggestions:
There is a typo in the first stanza.
The feelings are presented directly. It would improve this if you follow the rule "show, don't tell" a little more.
Comments:
This is a sweet poem, one that would be a good gift for one you love.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing!
Elizabeth
You responded to this review 09/15/2011 @ 4:18pm EDT
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