First Response: Well thought out and executed.

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Spelling and Grammar: "It’s all you ever wanted. But it’s nothing you can see." should be "it's all you ever wanted, but it's nothing you can see."
"A picture is worth a thousand words, your life none, verbal expression " should be: "A picture is worth a thousand words: your life..."

Good Points: I love the line, "An oath forward is only lying backwards. ". Very poetic and powerful. Same with "To do nothing is to feel everything."

Suggestions: "To do nothing is to feel everything" might be better read as: "To do nothing, is to feel everything."

Overall: A good, strong piece with a obvious emotional underlying structure.