Hi, my name is Bertie. I am reviewing this short story on behalf of WDC POWER REVIEWERS GROUP - A DOZEN DELIGHTS AUCTION.
I hope that my suggestions are helpful

TITLE: THE BAUMER PROJECT As a title for this story, I think it falls short. There is not enough about the "Project" to justify the story being named for the project.


THEME: A young woman seems to have taken on a bit too much at work.


STRUCTURE: It seems as though I am coming in to the middle of this story.


SPELLING, GRAMMAR, AND PUNCTUATION: No errors in these categories


MY OVERALL IMPRESSION: I liked this, but would like to see more background. The Baumer Project; if it is important enough to have named the story for it you should have more about The Project in the story.


MY FAVORITE PARTS: I like this over achiever. She is a very realistic character. The way she faints puts me in mind of one of those old nineteen twenty movie dramas where the young woman is rescued after a fainting spell by some dashing young man.


MY SUGGESTIONS: Work this up a bit more to round it out. Add a little more back story about Elise and her involvement with the Baumer Project so that the title fits better.




Thank you for permitting me to review your work. Keep writing and offering your work for review. Blessings, Bertie