Hello A*Monaing*Faith

My name is Dawn and I'll be reviewing your item in connection with "Gang's Monthly Review Board"  [13+] and with "I Write in December-January-February"  [E]. These are just my thoughts and forgive me if I ramble. Thank you for sharing your writing.


Title:
Not sure what the title is for the Round 6 poem that I'm reviewing out of the ones in the item. But it was nice to know the form.



Comments:
Woah. Wasn't expecting the picture but having figured out what you meant by the poem about midway in reading it. Wow... wonder if that cover qualifies as 13+... lol. Yeah, anyways. The poem was different. I know that you're trying for bad so that makes this review different too. So in an odd move, since I know nothing about Harry Potter, I'm going to comment on one point in particular. Didn't he star in the Horse thing when they were still making the Potter movies? I remember that whole, actor has nude scene thing brought up years ago. Just made me wonder about that part of it.

But I don't know if this qualifies as very bad, though I would definitely say it isn't a great poem either. It's a bit awkward for sure.



Form:
The poem followed the stanza rhyming form posted in the description about the one for round 6. The rhyme scheme worked with the couplets and the stanza line count works with the minimal requirements.



Rhythm/Rhyme:
The rhyme followed what was required and works for the most part. The rhythm of the poem is also fine though there is a stanza where I have question of sentence structure. Even with that one, the rhythm of the poem is fine.



Line-by-line and Suggestions:
These are just a couple of comments and things that came up when I was reading. My own opinions of course, just a few things to consider if you decide playing with it.

The second stanza, I wonder about the punctuation. It seems like that should be more than one sentence. The rhythm of the words still worked out but still I questioned the sentence form. In fact, some of the other paragraphs have a similar potential issues. I am not the most knowledged of when to use ";" versus putting it as more than one sentence.

No other comments really cause it's an attempt to write something awful. Since this is supposed to be bad I'm going to give it 1 star. Hope you enjoy that.