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 Seven Sins Open in new Window. [13+]
Each of the sins a stanza Wrath Greed Lust Pride Gluttony Envy Sloth
by Morgan Faere 2 Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi Morgan Faere 2 Author Icon -

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WHAT WORKED

*Bullet* I really loved the structure of this poem. You have an opening and closing stanza and, in between, each of the other stanzas focuses on one of the seven deadly sins. Really great, easy-to-follow and clever structure. *Thumbsup*


WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

*Bullet* TYPO: "A light touch, [passion's] fortune"

*Bullet* TYPO: "Just keep the [desserts] coming"

*Bullet* This is just a personal suggestion, but I wasn't able to decipher any discernible structure to the stanzas themselves. I think it would be great to have a structure to the stanzas themselves; in an item with a clear overall structure like the one you've got, it would be a wonderful little detail to have the stanzas themselves mirror that structure and add another layer of intricacy to this already intriguing item.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really liked the premise and the content. The structure of the piece as a whole was great and it was an engaging, entertaining poem. Well done! *Smile*


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