I selected your poem to review through the Random Read Forum of WdC.
 
It was a real pleasure reading your work and I am glad to give you some impressions I have of your piece as well as a short review.
 
My review is based solely on my opinion and feelings. While I may suggest some structural alterations, I prefer to lend my feelings and impressions about a story in the hopes that they may be of some help and encourage further thought about what has been created. Please take what you think is appropriate for your work and disregard the rest.
 
Overall Impression
 
“One thousand times I’d forget your name, but remembered it one thousand and one”
I am with the one who has developed this infernal “curse”. The setting is the mind and the mind is on an awful journey except for when it remembers the one it loves. As the poem opens I am confused about myself, but remember the one I love. Is that amnesia now? Probably not, but a good analogy of how the days develop as the demands of “making a living” and staying connected relationally grow and grow.
 
Interest and Pace
 
The wonderful quandary of a mind at lost with it’s own identity and yet ultra aware of its mate somewhere, out there, keeps me engaged from the first words to the last. The twist that the love has always been and the forgetting was just a way, a ploy for giving a love even more assurance of the inevitable indelibleness of the relationship is crafty, but wonderfully inventive at the same time. I was provoked to remember the times that I have done that. Your poem flows with great rhythm and presence and I enjoyed every word.
 
Structure and Clarity
 
A four line with a consistent meter and consistent rhyme is well done and makes your poem a comfortable read. I hum along with the words and enjoy the words that convey the slyness of the mind to play with me if I let it… but then I would never do that. Would I? The images and words I believe convey a clear story as well as a logical and easy to comprehend end.
 
Edits/Revisions
 
I was not aware of any need for edits or revisions. In fact the poem was extremely well written in every way.
 
Summary
 
“We’ll live together in happiness and never rue the day
That we met and learned to love, in this somewhat unique way
And when our time on Earth is done, we will finally part,
But not for very long my love, for you really have my heart
 
Your poem is a sweet reminder of how deep true love runs. Whether my mind is lucid and fully functioning or not. I remember my love and it transcends the powers of this world or my transitory forgetfulness.
 
 
Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your poem. I appreciate you sharing your gifts and talents.
 
~Kenword~
 
 
 
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