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Obviously, just one person's opinion. Please take with a grain of salt and disregard anything not helpful. *BigSmile*

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*Vignette6* What I liked best: The pacing and mystery.

*Vignette6* Plot: Zadicayn is taken by some men to complete a task for them. Once he completes it he's tossed into the undercroft and locked in.

*Vignette6* Hook: A few! Magic is always a good hook. But you've got a man who's family was used against him, to manipulate him into doing something for them. And then he's left locked up.

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*Vignette6* Just my personal opinion: I'm not a huge fan of period language but it's not overwhelming so it didn't bother me in this. I have a LOT of questions but you balanced it well and instead of being frustrated or confused, I'm intrigued. I want to know more about this world and Zadicayn. I definitely will check out another chapter because I really want to know where you take this!

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