Hi Stephen Scorer ,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones"  [13+].

Overall Impression:

This is a good poem, dear author. I can sense the frustration in it. I think that it's something many people will be able to relate to. I know that I can.

Sleep... wonderful when you have it, uninterrupted and peaceful. Yet, it can be so difficult to get it, and the interruptions are horrible.

You can try calm your mind, but the mind can be stubborn. And if it's night after night fighting that battle, it's exhausting. You describe that very well.

On the technical side of things, this poem read well. Nice rhythm and flow. Nice rhyming scheme. You have done a good job with it.

Suggestions:

I have no real suggestion about the content. I liked it. The only thing that I spotted is about your use of punctuation. You use some of it, which aids the overall clarity and reading experience. But it's missing in some places. I suggest adding those punctuation marks, to perfect it.

My Rating:

This is a good little poem. I am glad that I found it in your portfolio.

I did have one suggestion, but I guess that it's more of a personal preference than anything else. So I'll still give your item a rating of 5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work, and write on!

Kit




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .