Plot/story elements:

Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I love a good ghost story, especially one about high school sweethearts.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

It was short, and to the point. I like that you had her buried alive. It added to the creep factor and probably would a high point of interest to other readers who like creepy writing.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

It was a twisted romantic tale complete with a ghostly boyfriend. I love the note he left for in the locker. It was a nice bit of foreshadowing. She was cold and a bit of a social climber so it was kinda fun to give her some vengeance. Amelia was not exactly a warm protagonist that we care about.

Glows:

Every detail you write in the story packs a meaning to the story. There is no wasted text either. I kind of imagine this story in a graphic novel format. It would be really cool to read it in that sort of format.

Grows:

I had a hard time believing Amelia would go to the grave yard by herself even if she was expecting a prankster, but you did explain why she felt safe enough to go so at least you attempted an explanation. I read a lot of writing that wouldn't bother giving an explanation.



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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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