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Did I feel attached to the story or poem?

I can feel the anger emnating in this poem. I do think sometimes we forget there are others in way more need than we are no matter what our circumstances are. It's funny to read this now because I just had to introduce my 10 year old to harder living than he's used trying to erase a sense of entitlement I inadvertently raised him with. So, this Thanksgiving we're going to spend a night serving food who are in way more desperate circumstances than we are. I love that you wrote a piece from the perspective of the voiceless.


Would I recommend this piece of writing to someone else?

I would recommend it to my ten year old for sure if it didn't have some highly demonstrative vocabulary in there.


Was there a clear purpose to it?

Yep. Every line in that piece was full of purpose.


*StarStruck* Glows:

It was written well. The purpose was extremely relevant for my taste.


*Vine1* Grows:





*Dialog* Miscellaneous Comments:

It was written passionately and the language fits and is consistent with the mood of the piece. I love the anger and indignation of this piece because I'm sure a lot of the homeless population pass judgement right back on us, the ones that live in the ivory towers from their perspective anyway.


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~Tsa~ House of Greyjoy







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