" Reflections " [E] Nature reveals herself |
Hi T.L.Finch My name is Ken and I'm pleased to read and comment on your work "" Reflections "" on behalf of "Earth Day Challengers" . First Impression/Thoughts: A peaceful capture of nature and it's many facets. Creativity/Impact: I think you used this poem to create and express your revelations about nature. It is, in its own way, a miracle and you've captured that feeling. Message/Theme: Uhhh, Earth Day? Okay, I'm a bit prejudiced since this is an Earth Day activity LOL. The message is for each of us to take time and enjoy the beauty that's around us. Technique/Technical Notes: I offer you the following as food for thought and not as criticism. I encourage you to consider what I offer but always follow your instinct and heart. You are the poet. Title: "Reflections." I liked the double meaning of your title. It caught my attention and will surely catch the attention of other readers. The "teaser" line (or description ) offers an opportunity to add some clarification and can also be a great tool to attract more readers. I think yours, while brief, captured the meaning in your poem. Grammar/Wording: The words you chose were illustrative of the images you created in your poem. You used words that brought movement and stimulated more than visual but also added a tactile dimension to your poem. Form/Flow: You wrote this in Quatrains using an abcb rhyme. The alternating line meter worked well to keep this moving. Read aloud, this flowed very well. Overall Rating/Final Thoughts: An enjoyable, relaxing read that took me into the moment. Your recognition of the moment and capture of it was excellent. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with me today. Writing is about communication and this is what I saw in your work and is provided solely for your use. It's offered in a spirit of wanting to give you honest feedback... nothing more. Keep writing! Wishing you all the best for Earth Day 2017, Ken
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