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What I liked
I love the idea of the poem, and it's strong structure, how each part of the poem performs a function in the symbolism of the transition from winter to spring. I think that the spring section is particularly well written because there's a clear chronological sequence of events from thaw through buds blooming to laughing children.
"buds pop their heads for a look" - consider: buds pop heads out for a look. It keeps the same syllable count, so it agrees to your structure, yet sounds smoother, imho.
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