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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This was a great entry. I was laughing so hard at the 'molester' part and how that scene quickly got out of hand as people gathered round. You described everything really well as Gerald's night of drinking played out.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The added elements of humor. I know it's a serious subject matter, but the laughter worked so well here and added to the reason why he stopped drinking in the first place.

PLOT~
Gerald has three too many drinks at the bar and is unable to drive home. Once he starts walking home, he finds even that a bit of a challenge as he crashes into walls, light poles and eventually a woman who thinks he's trying to attack her. Some three-day benders happen for a reason, and this one gave Gerald what he needed to make sure it didn't happen again.

CHARACTER~
Gerald is so drunk he can hardly walk, and as he has the presence of mind to try to walk straight, he's too drunk to pull it off. This one night for him lasted three whole days, and since he forgot his wallet, he wound up in jail to sleep it off. Adding Mrs. Bickford in added to your plot. I loved her stinking drunk comment. Though she understood what had happened with Gerald, she didn't like it at all and that came through loud and clear.




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