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OVERALL IMPRESSION -
This story moved fast as Alan stood to wait for Sandra to show. I like that about these Daily Flash challenges. You worked in all of the prompt words well and managed to create a sad, but a creepy story.

WHAT I LIKED BEST -
The descriptions of the lake and use of the prompt word mirror when you described the birds and clouds going by overhead.

PLOT~
Alan and Sandra are lovers who meet in a hidden cove on the lake. Sandra is married to Frank, a horrible man who keeps his wife on a short leash. Today is the day they will make their escape, and leave a trail that would lead the police and Frank to think that Sandra had simply drowned in the lake and died. Alan waits, but Sandra never shows. When he hears sirens he soon realizes why she's late, and looking down into the lake again, he sees her lifeless eyes staring up at him.

CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~
Sandra in a bad marriage, ready to take a chance with Alan and run away. Alan who waits for the woman he's fallen in love with, and as time ticks by begins to worry. Frank who found out about their affair and takes matters into his own hands.

You did a really good job showing what the lake looked like and how hidden their private cove was.

TECHNICAL~
startled by a siren abruptly sounded- perhaps sounding instead
House Greyjoy image for G.o.T.

This would be my name.
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