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Given: Aug 15, 2017 at 11:41am
Length: 1,075 Characters |
1,073 w/o WritingML
Hi Beebeeb, I am reviewing your story "Hollows Hills: The Town of Evil PART V" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.
♥ This story is about four highschool girls that are witches. One night the highschool girls go to the cemetery and awaken a man by the name of Count Douierre.
♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: I think you should add a break in between the witches and Jack and Beverly's dialogue. I was a bit confused when the story was talking about one thing and then abruptly switched to something different. I think this would lessen confusion. The story seems well written otherwise.
♥ Spelling/Grammar: I spotted no common grammatical or spelling errors.
♥ Overall: I really enjoyed this chapter of your book. Cheryl is not a nice person, and I look forward to learning more about her, and her coven of witches. I want to know where the count comes in. As well as, where Jack and Beverly fit in, I guess more reading is in my immediate future!
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