By the title alone I had a bad feeling about this story, and I was not disappointed in the least. That not so nice twist towards the end made the words of the title all the more heart wrenching, especially upon finishing. Your story really grabs the readers attention from the beginning and keeps you motivated to see it through despite the direction a readers mind might think it's going to head.



This played out far differently than I imagined it would. My first gasping moment was when the boy sought to save his sister, the only way he knew how. My heart was broken upon the awareness and pain of the boy defeating the darkness finally.



I thought the flow of the story was well thought out and very well written. Your story caught a readers attention with the small peaks into the setting and thoughts of the characters which was ideal.

The only suggestions I might give you is that there seemed to be quite a bit of short sentences in succession. For me, this interrupts the flow of reading the story some, which may cause a distraction to other readers and reviewers as well.



This story shows the emotion, helping the reader feel the desperation of the boy in the horrible situation he's faced. From the small frame of time in the story only proves your intuition that these poor children had endured tremendous suffering. I felt sympathy only for the boy in this story, for losing his sister over anything else.






My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .