The Other Side Of The Mirror [E] I don't know how to describe this except that its filled with depth. |
Hi Rosei, I am reviewing your poem "The Other Side of the Mirror Never Smiles" on behalf of games of thrones here on WDC. Rhythm/Rhyme: I am a fan of free verse and I liked what you did here. Your flow needs a little work, but it was easy enough for me to read, and I don't think that it detracted from the image that you portrayed. Imagery: I enjoyed your description of the "other" staring back at you in the mirror. My favorite line was, "When I see you I'm reminded of the overwhelming feeling of drowning, maybe that’s why I hate the beach..." That part spoke to me on an elemental level, because I too have looked upon myself in the mirror, and felt as though I were drowning. Impressions: Overall the poem was well written with a few punctuation errors. I think your sentence structure could be improved, but all in all a solid read. This review was written freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely. Note: I am writing on my iPad and my spelling may be slightly off, please excuse any typos ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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