Hi pentips, I am reviewing your story "A Trip Down the River" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC ♥ This short story is about a guy named Sam and a girl named Jess who go canoeing one pleasant morning, but their morning does not go as planned. While canoeing they discover a beautiful luminescent patched along the roof and the walls of a cavern, and then something mighty strange happens. They are taken through a whirlpool, and summarily dumped in a new place, and maybe even a new time. ♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The short seemed to be well written. I do not have anything to offer in regards to this. ♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not notice any common grammar or spelling errors. ♥ Overall: This was a fast and short read. I enjoyed reading this action and adventure. The only thing that I had a problem with was that it was not longer, but other than that it was fantastic overall, and I look forward to reading more from this author. This review was given freely in thanks for a writing that was written freely ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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