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| Review brought to you by: "Game of Thrones" by Creeper Of The Realm  OVERALL IMPRESSION - What a scene with your main characters, James and Megan, as James has discovered his brother is dead and that Megan is a vampire. Things do not go well during their conversation. WHAT I LIKED BEST - The heated conversation between these two worked well, letting the reader immediately get a feel of what was going on between them. PLOT~ James blames Megan for killing her brother and cannot even being himself to the say the word 'vampires', though Megan doesn't find it to be a difficult word. She's comfortable with what she is. Megan explains that she didn't kill his brother, but knows who did and vows to make sure they pay for it. James still struggles with all of the new information and argues with Megan because he wants to find his brother's killer and get his revenge. CHARACTER(S)~DESCRIPTION~ The vampiress Megan and James. I wasn't quite sure if these two were married or not, but it is clear they have a relationship. Dialog only story. DIALOG~ This was great. They argued throughout most of the scene, and James' anger really shined through with the swearing and word choices you used. Megan seemed completely calm while they spoke. I loved that he told her he was going to kill her and she countered that she was already dead. I couldn't help but laugh, even though the scene was a little intense.   
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