Hi Craig, I am reviewing your short story "Undone By Greed" on the behalf of Game of Thrones here on WDC.

♥ This fun little short is about a Sheriff and doctor attempting to solve the case of, who really robbed the train. This short features a prisoner, the doctor, Doc Higgins, the sheriff, and two really dumb criminals. The short starts off with a prisoner struggling to get out of his bonds, and Doc Higgins, Clyde and the sheriff discussing the criminals and whether or not Clyde had seen them. The scene then switches to three criminals outside of town surrounding a camp fire with a bag of bottles which the gang leader promptly threw into the fire, all fifteen vials were full of "Zombie Plague Vaccine.", but no one noticed because they were illiterate.

♥ Things I noticed/specific suggestions: The piece was really short but well written. The only thing that I did not like is the transitioning from one scene to the next abruptly. It kind of confused me

♥ Spelling/Grammar: I did not notice any spelling or grammar errors.

♥ Overall: This short story was a fast read, and it seemed to be well thought out. I enjoyed this short immensely and I look forward to reading more of your work. I really do need to know whether or not that "Zombie Plague Vaccine" did something to those criminals, I have a feeling that they were simply too dumb for it to work correctly.

This review was given freely in exchange for a story that was written freely, thank you, Craig, for allowing me to review your short story.


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