Hello Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of Thrones"  I hope that you are enjoying your time here on Writing.com (WDC). This is a really good community to be apart of.

Overall Impressions~
This poem is a bit vague. This poem to me does not make any sense. You refer to earthy things then at the end you refer to The one. It would seem that is a human. I'm not sure I understand the point of the poem.
You've written about the wind that brought you up from a pit that had no light.
You have written about a fountain that brought you out of the water and taught you to breathe to a suffocated heart.
You have written about the mountain that raised you above the rest of the world while the world grew smaller at your feet.
You have written about hope that ignited your world from blazing sprinkles of faith, with one kiss and one touch.
You have written about the one who raised you to become more than you are or can ever be. This last one makes sense. I really wish I could understand where you are coming from, so I could know how to offer changes with this piece.
You are a good beginning author. I don't want to hurt you, and while I cannot offer changes to this piece I want to encourage you to keep writing. Don't give up if this is the path you are supposed to be on.

Thank you for sharing, Keep writing.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .