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Review by Cadie Laine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello, Cadie here reviewing on behalf of "Game of ThronesOpen in new Window. I hope you've found this community a comforting place to land your thoughts in.

Overall Impressions~
You've written a personal poem. I like that you have someone you can turn to in order to help you get out what you need to get out. You describe the way Tanja helps you really well. I would have to say that this poem doesn't need much else in the way of descriptions. We don't need to see this friend just know what she's there for you when you need her.
This is a good poem. Your flow and rhythm are well written. You repeated the same sentence throughout the poem in a way that adds to the poem and distracts from what the poem says. It's like a reminder of how she's there for you in your writing.
If you decide to add to this you might look at writing with more descriptions of her and what exactly she does to help you? Do you call her on the phone, or is she close enough that you can see her when you need her? Is she family or just friend or maybe a lover.
This poem is great just the way it is. There's no spelling errors and grammar in poetry, doesn't really make sense to me. Good job!

Thank you for sharing, Keep writing
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