Hello Cat Voleur , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Invalid Item"  as part of the March "Invalid Item" .

My First Thoughts: The first sentence hooked me with speaker's statement about his mother. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing his personality.

My Favorite Part: I like the speaker because he is sympathetic and intriguing.

My Final Thoughts and/or Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to write longer story based on this character. I enjoyed reading this item because of the main character.








My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .