Hi Andy~hating university ! I'm popping into your port today in celebration of your fourth account anniversary! Congratulations! In addition, because Halloween is fast approaching, I figured I'd better review one of your darker items

Yeesh! What a perfectly horrible story! The ending was especially well done. It left me with so many questions! This may just be my imagination at work, but I think the cat may have been a witch? I don't know, but my first thought was that the cat was Professor McGonagall from Harry Potter . In any case, the strange demon thing Mr Myers should not be messed with. I wonder though, why was the main character able to sleep after witnessing that scene? If anything, I would think he would want to get out of there as fast as possible.

At first, when I read this sentence: "I’ve even heard about people becoming so paranoid that they have become homicidal" I thought that was a bit of foreshadowing and the story would end with Mr Myers falling under the hand of the main character. That would have been an interesting ending, but yours was even more of a surprise! I wonder what Mr Myers is? Very strange ...

With the phrase: "must have been a trick of the light," maybe you want to mention the insomnia again? Tie it back together with the hallucinations? Maybe the main character thinks what he's seeing is a paranoid hallucination, and can't possibly be real, but then when he wakes and finds the dead cat, he realizes it did actually happen? Just an idea

I seriously laughed at this bit: "but when we are talking about two consenting adults who are more than old enough to have witnessed the coronation of Queen Elizabeth the Second" Wow! I'm dying!!

Thanks for sharing your story and happy anniversary!
Take care,
Emily

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