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Those little white flowers. Open in new Window. [E]
They never fail to ignite a sense of happiness.
by jaya Author Icon
Review by Emily Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi jaya Author Icon! It's your account anniversary coming up - congratulations! *GiftT*

*StarB* Oh wow, this is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed how you began by bringing the imagery of the little white flowers to life and then transitioning into a more inspirational tone and loving emotion. You transitioned well from the grace and beauty of nature to the grace and love for other humans beings and the world around us. This poem brings joy and hope, and I read it again and again - good work! *ThumbsUpL*

*StarG* My suggestions for you are only to do with the formatting as I loved each and every word. To help this piece stand on its own, I would encourage you to separate the notes at the bottom related to the line count and contest you entered from the rest of the poem in some way, whether that be more line spaces between the bottom of the poem and the top of the notes, or with a different font size or style. You might also consider removing the poem title within the piece as I think the title at the top is sufficient. The reason I say these things is because the words of the poem work so perfectly on their own, it would help to give them separation from the other words within this item. I like to add a discrete black line above the notes like this:
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*StarB* Thank you for sharing your poem! And again, happy anniversary month! Take care,
Emily

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