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May God bless both of us as we grow as writers together!


A challenge to review an item from the friendship genre has me reviewing your item today! *Wink*

Title and Brief Description:

Let's start with your title: "Mischief and Mayhem" and the Brief Description containing the words "about boys being boys". This is exactly what brought me to check out your story. It sounded like it might be fun to read and I was not disappointed. I enjoy your adventure.

The Main Course:

As I mentioned above, I enjoyed reading about you and your friend and the adventure of the flying milk bottle. I also liked the fact you used a larger font which made it very easy for me to read. Your writing flowed well and was delightful.

As far as spacing, you do have a very large space at the bottom of your story. You might want to eliminate all those blank lines just to make it look a little more polished.

Summary:

Other than the big space at the bottom, the story was great, the writing was great, and the overall appearance was great.

It was a fun read! And, the last line made me laugh—about how the distance that milk bottle flew got bigger the more your friend (now an adult) imbibed... *Rolling*




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