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| (4.0)| Greetings, J. J. Netzach  !Welcome to this wondrous writing community. I see you have overcome those lingering doubts about "Who would read this stuff?" and proceeded to populate your port for the world to see during your first few months among us. The following observations are offered in the spirit of friendly hospitality and constructive support, but they are nothing more than one person's opinions, so take them or leave them for whatever you think they may be worth. TITLE: Unless your name is Edgar Allan Poe, or that of some other famous poet, whose reputation is enough to attract a fawning audience, the title is one of the most important elements of any composition. It sets the tone and prepares the random reader for what is to come. If that entrance does not spark some sort of interest, chances are he or she will move along to the next item, or maybe even the next author. The title of this poem lures that browser across the threshold into the realm of your imagination with its invitation to share the most intimate thoughts of your narrator. IMAGERY: Concrete nouns, such as "Convoys" and "Railroads," provide the metaphorical substance which gives the reader something solid to grasp in his mind's eye. POETIC TECHNIQUE: The pounding rhythm of alliteration and repetition reinforce your narrator's expression very effectively. The cross rhyming in the last two lines serve as an emphatic point of punctuation in conclusion. OVERALL IMPRESSION: Art happens in two places: in writers' minds as they create it, and in readers' minds as they perceive it. Poets explore possibilities through a lens colored by past experience and shares them with an unseen audience. They call upon a unique reservoir of such enlightenment, conceptual skill and innovative research to project some spiritual sensation upon the screen of the audience's imagination--be it joy, melancholy, shock, or any of a thousand others. In this case, you and your narrator have managed to capture the essence of angst frequently encountered during this process very succinctly. Thank you for sharing! If you are interested in learning more about the craft of composing poetry, or merely chatting among like-minded wordsmiths, we would love to have you join our discussions in "The Poet's Place " group. Let the creativity flow from your soul!  Dave "The Poet's Place "  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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