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Given: Apr 18, 2020 at 6:08pm
Length: 902 Characters |
759 w/o WritingML
Introductions~
Cadie here reviewing for Building Emotion Lesson 1. I do apologize for not reviewing this piece sooner, I thought I had already completed this.
Personal Impressions~
You got a good beginning. You showed what the Elize was feeling but not what Mac was feeling. I get the impression that he likes her but their relationship is based on two strangers meeting in a bowling alley. What's the story of her bowling, why does she do it? Why does Mac approach her? She doesn't seem leary of a strange man watching her, more like love at first sight.
I look forward to reading what else you've got in store for these two. I didn't see any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes.
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