Hello. I am reviewing this as a random read and review exercise.

Intro:
As for a contest entry, I think it is well written with adequate amount of thrills in it. I hope you win.

Characters:
I am fascinated by the character of Shelly as one my friend has the same name and almost the same character sketch. I see you are explaining the game too with your story. It's exciting.

Tim is also a relatable character. As english is not my first language, I learned many new words from your story.

Overall review:
A nice story to be read.

Keep writing.
Lurie

"WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" 

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .