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  |  | Promptly Poetry Challenge 2021-22  [18+] Rd 2 for Lilli's weekly prompts. My muse will need a S'bux gift card for this one. ☕️  |
| (5.0)  Greetings Mike. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" in affiliation with "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  Personal Impression Impressive! I enjoyed the language and vibe of the expression and on first scan did not notice the acrostic form I was so into the poem. Thanks for the note at the bottom.  I love acrostics and they can be a challenge at times.  Tone and Mood It has a romantic air with intense emotional potency. The conversation between the lovers is vivid and the first speaker so desperate and pleading and she ready to captivate. Reminds me of a sonnet especially with the lovely language. It is easy to hear the emotions.  Rhyme, Form and FlowThe form of the acrostic is effective and well constructed with a coherent flow and appealing words for each beginning letter. Great find for the letter X and suggestive of that eternal ideal.  The flow feels quick with intensity and descriptions are vivid. The flow is assisted by your effective use of assonance, like long e, i sounds, and consonance, like the t, s and words that alliterate. They sound delicious as I read aloud. The emphasis on the binding is clear in the last verse.I think the way you use the language gave a sense of old time and place. Beginning lines with "Else" and "Replied the maid" got my attention too!  Grammar and PunctuationI enjoyed the poem and found no glitches to throw me out of the vision. The language suit the emotion, content and romantic theme and punctuation was purposeful. The dialogue was clearly marked so no confusion as to who was speaking. I enjoyed the flair when you change order of words about like in "Else suffer I must"! It gave the work a distinct vibe.   Emotional ImpactIntensity shone forth and I was lured into the romantic scene. I could imagine it clearly and felt both parties. The contrast of their tones was effective. Felt like Shakespeare! A nice happy ending is so satisfying. Though I had a thought..is she a controller... doing a spell. LOL She certainly has a force about her. Ah LOVE!!   Thanks for sharing this vibrant expression and excellent crafting. I was entertained and it felt complete at the end. I had fun.Write on in your unique way! eyestar
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