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Hello Redtowrite ,

I spotted your poem in one of the gardens at "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" , and as one of the gardeners, I am here to read and review your lovely offering!

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

Wow! Emotional indeed. The first and second stanzas left me wondering what was coming next and had me hopeful for a peaceful resolution. But the last stanza keeps the reader locked in what is much more the reality, I'm afraid.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

breaths
This should be breathes.

One mo hungry bitch
Consider placing a comma at the end of this line.


Closing Comments:

Good luck in the contest with this powerful and emotional poem.



Thank you for sharing your work.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .