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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title:
         Your title suggests something about the future. It tells us beforehand that your piece will tackle the future events in the year 2038. As with the description, I can't figure out why it says a 160 poem.


Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
         The writer shows a feeling of awe and disbelief at how the earth turns inside-out in the future. The phrase "Hell on Earth is here" somehow surprised me after reading it. I was thinking that maybe the earth is too hot already in the year 2038. Or perhaps the earth is already filled with negativities, violence is all over, and everyone is already a slave to the seven deadly sins. Or maybe, just maybe the earth's core burst out to the crust as you said on the second stanza that "Everything turns inside out". The reason is vague for me and I can't point out the cause. This can create confusion (ambiguous thoughts) to the readers.


Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:
         A single quatrain with no set meter and rhyme. A free verse poem.


Artistic Voice and Imagery:
         The imagery is not that clear as the poem lacks something base on what I mention above.


Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:
         No error detected.


Favorite Lines:
None.


Suggestions:
         I suggest you add more lines or stanzas to give a little background about Hell on Earth is here.


Final Thought:
         I like to see and read more lines to this poem. I understand that poem doesn't need to be lengthy (as for haikus and other short poems), but this is different. It lacks something for me. Maybe it's just me and others may view it as complete and clear. I know you will receive more reviews from other readers and their views may be different from mine, so it's up to you if you take mine or not. It was a great read though and I thank you for sharing your work. Write on!


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