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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Sun*Greetings Blue Moon. I am happy to celebrate You with a review on behalf of "Poetry Review Garden [on hiatus]" Open in new Window..


*Flowerr*The title made me curious about the answer to the blues! I totally agree with your first advice about not watching the news. That is also a great way not to get caught up the stress.

*Butterflyo* I notice you have bolded certain phrases and wonder if they are from prompts. I liked the imagery of the lines about the wind being a pest. I could imagine all the magics the west wind could blow in. Too bad it is a pest.

*Flowerb* I enjoyed the tone and flow and your rhymes work well. In structure I think the part "Don't watch the news: should appear as a second line.

*Dragonflyp* A few glitches for me:

*Bulletg* Should "teaches" be "teachers"?
*Bulletgr* I don't see the need of a question mark in the last line as it is not a direct question with the word, "wondering". *Wink*
*Bulletgr* For the flow I would like to see the word "because" dropped. It makes the flow chunky.

*Star* The poem feels like a bit of a rap song with lots to think about. A note about the contest might be helpful. *Smile* Thanks for sharing your song like reflections.

Write on in your style!
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