Oh wow! Your description of this pain is so vivid. Ouch! My dad suffered with rheumatoid arthritis when I was growing up... not fun for him and not fun to watch. I could imagine the scene especially getting up in the morning when stiffness can be the worst. The determination of the speaker is potent as one must struggle through.
The free verse form suits the theme and content and it was pleasant to read aloud. The contrast you make at the end is so evocative. Use of the winter season is a good choice as I think one does feel the cold and damp worse then. Sad on both issues! The link between line one and the end is subtle.
Word choices were effective, eg, Hobble, grating, burning, etc in creating a scene that engages the senses. Bless folks who need to deal with this daily.
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