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I love the contrast in your poem. Although the two sections contrast, they merge to form a single image of the passage of time. In some respects the concept of your poetry form is similar to a septolet, which serves to create a single image from two different (but not contrasting) perspecives.

You make excellent use of personification in your poem to bring nature to life. I especially enjoyed the visual of winter's "choking hugs". This is something we can empathise with as it is something we experience ourselves in the depths of winter.

I also liked how the attitude of the trees changed between winter and spring. Using birdsong as the thing that makes the trees happy in spring is a nice touch.

I love the visual you create in the first stanza of "Springtime is In". The use of synonyms for colour, rather than repeating the same word, and the use of language referring to spring as a "colossal canvas" is really clever.

The last line is a really nice way to end the poem as it captures the quintessential essence of spring.

Thank you for sharing this item! Please keep on writing!


Andy~hating university


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