Okay, I do this too so don't think of it as a bad criticism. You should have typed out the name of the conest or challenge that this was written for because as in your case sometimes they are closed and the item deleted so the reference to their origin is gone forever. Including the precise prompt used would have also answered my question as to why this was written. If you are afraid these suggestions would clutter the piece up you can always put that information in a drop note labeled prompt, info, or notes.

Okay next thing I noticed the whole thing is written about the native tribes of Minnesota. You go into how and why the two tribes came to be there The Dakota Sioux tribe and the Ojibwe tribe, also called Chippewa, okay got that. But where in that do you mention The Cherokee as having to do with Minnesota.
If that is another of the names of one of the tribes you should discuss that before leaping in with the stomp dance information. I just found that confusing. Also it would have been nice to know what the ultimate fates of these tribes was. White people don't have a history of treating them well...

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