The Treasure Map [18+] Samantha buys a "treasure map" and discovers magic behind the rainbow - for Short Shots. |
"The Open Scroll [Entrance Task]" has me reviewing your item today! Well, actually, I am doing "Entrance Task #2..." from "The Open Scroll [Entrance Task]" . It has me writing five reviews. They each have to be 1000 characters long (excluding WritingML) and I must also include a link to "Ultimate Trinket Adventure [Mainland]" within the review: "Ultimate Trinket Adventure [Mainland]" This is my second review for you today. I enjoyed "Deborah’s DIY Date" so much, I visited your port to find a second story. Let's see what we find as we read "The Treasure Map" Title and Brief Description:"The Treasure Map" lured me in as did the Brief Description. I don't really care for "for Short Shots" being included in the description but many folks do that. I used to. FONT: The font you have used for this story hurts my eyes. Unclear to me: Your sentence, "Samantha had played Tomb Raider, so she knew the dangers of seeking hidden treasure." likely works well for your readers who are familiar with "Tomb Raider". That group, unfortunately does not include me. Would there be a better way to express this to embrace a broader demographic? Hmmm... now I have discovered "Tomb Raider" is going to be an ongoing theme... Ewww... Okay, I want to read more of the last story. I do NOT want to read any more of this one. It has an icky ending. This is more what I was expecting while reading "Deborah’s DIY Date". This time, I wasn't prepared. You caught me off guard. My rating probably has been affected by my displeasure regarding the end of this story but maybe not. This story did not have the build up "Deborah’s DIY Date" had. Maybe I would have enjoyed it more if it did. Maybe I would like it more if I played "Tomb Raider", eh? I still want to explore your port a bit more. Write On! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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