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Fear leads to fear and hate.
by cheshire
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Review by KingsSideCastle
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Good Poem. I like the flow. It read very smoothly and was set up very well. With the questions being posed to the readers in three of the stanzas...there seemed to be a really good rhythm to them. My favorite segments though were the second and third stanzas of this. I liked how the words circled around i.e. (Fear leads to Fear, hate leads to hate etc). There was also a really great alliteration in Fear fosters anger. It was an interesting choice to cut the the question in the second to last stanza. It almost as if it displays a sense of exasperation on the part of the narrator that he/she couldn't finish their thought. I also like the change from the change from the question in the beginning vs the questions towards the end. In the beginning the questions being ask are about behaviors we could chance and at the end the questions are about behaviors we should aspire to. Well done

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