The poem definitely puts the reader in the mindset of the character. It is nice to that the reader gets to follow along on the journey with him. The character undergoes a lot of growth in this from wanting immortality, obtaining it, getting bored with it and wishing that he didn't have it. I guess is always greener on the other side. The strength of this poem is that writer is able to convey the characters thoughts really smoothly as they gradually transition to the exact opposite of what the narrator originally wanted. When you look at the beginning and end of this piece, it is a nice contrast between the two mindsets the character had.

This review was written for "Ultimate Trinket Adventure [Mainland]" 

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .