Hey Nanapockets,
         I saw your suitcase on the Anniversary Review page and thought I'd drop in to honor this occasion, your 18^th WDC Anniversary!

         I'm a sap for stories like this. I have come to firmly believe that everyone I've met is nice, for the most part. I've traveled around the world a bit, been in countries that you'd swear were not a good place to be. Algeria is an example. You know the stories we've seen posted on the good ol' internet. Believers in Islam are all bad, they want to rule the world, and kill those who are not believers. Sadly, I don't think Christians are much better. Anyway, everywhere I've been, I've found good people, people full of love. This story reminds me of that.

         WDC has made me a bit of a critic, no matter what I read, I look at it with a critical eye. Despite liking this story overall, it does need a little editing. Very little, but still.... My comments on it are below.


1. "Are you save you want to hear this?" He asked. Save should be sure.

2. "Sho couldn't speak English and I could not Japanese. You are missing the word speak before Japanese. I know it seems obvious, but it should be there.

3. Your description makes it sound like Sho and Grandpa are enemies. They are not, their countries are, or might be, but the people in this story are not enemies. My comment above about the world fits here. I've come to believe that people do not necessarily hate other countries and their people. Governments do. Those in control do. Place a person in a position of power, and they change. Power corrupts.

         This is a nice short story, thank you for sharing!



Sum1





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .