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| Hello Jade Jaspers  Happy WDC 23rd Birthday! This is a review on behalf of "Angel Review Forum"  [ASR] This is only my views. Please use or discard as you're comfortable with.   A nice piece of prose that had me thinking and reflecting. You really painted some beautiful scenes. Consider breaking up your paragraphs. Put a space or two between the paragraphs every time you start with, "And then there is this".  Title and Description - Good title that caught my attention. The description made me curious enough to want to read on. Theme/Subject Matter:- A person alone with his thoughts. Where they go and how it affects him/her. Originality/Creativity:- Very creative form of writing down the thoughts of your mind. Emotion/Impact: - It left me with thoughts of how beautiful it can be when you train your mind to go to beautiful places. My Suggestions - where all the natural thingswhere all of the natural things  in soundsin the sounds  all of the memories vision in the night find a word to define these moments that where I have a few thoughts and the time. life linelifeline  its natural want from the page where it longs to put intoit's natural to want... longs to be put into  Summary: Thank you for sharing your inspirational prose with us. I truly enjoyed it! KEEP ON WRITING ON!  Intuey  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 11/07/2023 @ 8:44pm EST