Hello 🌕 HuntersMoon !

This winter-themed poem of yours was featured in my "read & review" section and I enjoyed it so I decided to give you a review. I hope you enjoy it and find it encouraging and uplifting.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
I loved your Winter Symphony poem! Well done!

You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

I don't know that I've ever read a sedoka form poem before. I was glad you explained it at the bottom, in the notes section. Your syllable counts are perfect and the poem has a nice flow to it. Well done!


It's hard to pick a favorite line in this poem. I really like four of them, so I'll just say the first stanza is my favorite.


I imagine that anyone with arthritis could really relate to that last stanza, even if they don't appreciate the pain of it, it's always nice to know one is understood.

I love that you employed multiple poetic devices that lent to the rhythmic feel of this icy poem of yours.


I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your poem. Well done!


Your poem was interesting to me and beautifully written. Well done!



IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
I would love to have something great to share here, but I think the writing is perfect as it is. Well done!

The only suggestion I have has nothing to do with your writing, but with the contest you entered this in (originally). I wondered what it was? It just shows as "invalid item" for me. I know you wrote this over fourteen years ago, so it's entirely possible you don't remember (I probably would not), but if you do, you could maybe take the writing ml out and replace it with the name of the contest and a note that it's no longer going. Just my two cents there.



CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and sense of the poetic and I enjoy reading your poems and other writings. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .