Greetings sindbad !

This is your seventh (last) day port raid as part of you "A Week of Port Raid Package" from "Magical Express Delivery Wagon"  gifted to you by your Secret Valentine. May you'll find this review an inspiring and encouraging one.

Without much a do, here are the things I found out after reading your offering:

Your poem masterfully employs imagery to create a tangible experience. Lines like "giant mouth of the gathering dark," "neon fingers like jellyfish," and "damp muslin over my years" immerse the reader in the scene.

The night transcends a literal time. It becomes a character – a "waste watchman," "prehistoric ship," and "bedfellow." These unusual metaphors deepen the poem's complexity and create a sense of intimacy with the unknown. The journey isn't merely through darkness but inside it. Themes of death and potential rebirth are intertwined: "ashes," "phosphorescent sea," "stillborn babies" hint at new beginnings even within decay.

There's a raw vulnerability in lines like "I breathe hesitantly" and "How difficult, to let it go." This struggle between clinging to the familiar (darkness) and longing for the unknown (emerging dawn) gives the poem universal relatability. The juxtaposition of beauty and discomfort is expertly navigated. Images like "phosphorescent sea" and "giant branches" hold strange beauty, while phrases like "blood night" and "collected miseries" introduce tension that captivates the reader.

In essence, your poem uses vivid language and complex symbolism to illuminate the human experience of facing the unknown and embracing inevitable change. There's a raw depth here, born from vulnerability and the tension between holding on and letting go. Indeed, a beautiful piece and I enjoyed my reading. Thank you for sharing this! Write on.

Best regards,
Gervic