This is a good poem. It conjures up a lot of visual images such as the environment of the beach, the umbrella and various types of weather that the narrator experiences. The poem makes great use of descriptive colors using them to convey emotions. I particular loved the colors of the ocean described. The Umbrella works really well as a symbol sharing the narrator's loneliness.

On a rhythmic level this poem is good with a nice set of rhymes to read through making it easy for readers to enjoy.

There are a couple of technical recommendations/notes:

-In the second stanza it circles around a bit with the narrator crying twice.

-In the third stanza there seems to be a typo - "So I grabbed the Umbrella and dashed the the park"

Other than that... it is a very nice poem. Thank you for writing!




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