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Given: Mar 14, 2024 at 10:27pm
Length: 874 Characters |
874 w/o WritingML
Great details! Drew and Valerie are hanging out at his house in the evening and wanted to spend some time together in bed. Drew spoke in the language of what she would look like in his world and she went along with it. Then he talked about him dying and her living. She now has more thoughts to think about.
The chapters flow neatly together so far in chronological order. Will she feel the call for the other world when he judges she is ready? Or will she have a choice to be herself as a nobody? Time will tell and this must be a week in. Circles and stars. Interesting. Sad Drew's friend got taken by the soldiers. (Didn't make it.) So now I know the world isn't all glamour. Valerie knows too.
No spelling or grammar errors found. There is bullying to be stopped everywhere and Valerie has to do it. Wonder if she'll achieve it. Good job and keep up the good work!
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