express in EIght More Poems [13+] Express It Eight Daily Poems |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Hello, J Cosmos! Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I thought it'd be fun to close out this month with a review of one of your Express it in Eight poems. I liked this one so selected it for the review. I hope you enjoy this celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting. INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW: I enjoyed reading your poem about living mindfully. Well done! You kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end. Well done! MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK: My favorite line of this mindful poem of yours was: "live each day fresh." I think that's great advice. Well done! You offer some great advice on mindful living and life in general in this short, eight-line poem of yours. Well done! I liked that you included the prompts at the end too. Well done! I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your mindful living poem. Well done! IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of a review challenge I'm in), I have a few little suggestions to make your piece stronger. I'm having to dig deep for these as I really thought your piece was well done as it is though. So if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! I didn't really understand the last line's meaning? It is: "die before you live." I've heard the phrase "live before you die" before. I wondered if that's what you meant? Or something else? Or maybe you meant to have "don't" at the start of the line? That would make sense to me. Anyway, I might just be a dunce here, but I thought I'd share my point of confusion, in case I'm not the only one. I would recommend including a note that the three capitalized lines at the bottom are prompts from the Express it in Eight challenge. I know that they are, because I'm a sometimes participant there, but not everyone does. It would be helpful to those who don't, I think, to have it clearly spelled out. CONCLUSION: You have a nice writing style and I enjoy reading your work / posts / poems. Well done! Thank you for sharing your time, community spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community! May mindfulness, love, joy and peace be yours in abundance! PWheeler A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review! Positive Hearts A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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