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Hi Quotefreak97

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: You'd Think

First Impression: You'd Think reminded me of a heartbreaking time in this reader's life when her son called to tell her his son, her grandson had died the result of a dirt bike crash. I knew when the phone number displayed on my cell phone it was bad news like in your song. The pain is unbearable. I'm sorry for your loss.

What needs your attention: In the chorus this one one line doesn't really deliver the impact desired: "You’d think your heart breaking would ring the louder than anything" May I suggest You'd think your heart breaking,
would implode like a firework display. The definition fits the emotion needed: end or fail suddenly or dramatically. The reader or listener needs to feel the pain the singer feels.

What part I liked best: I thought the stanza about the struggle of each new day. The rehashing what could have been done different. Did they know how much they were loved? Did they die instantly or did they suffer?

I don't know about you but the expression God will never give you more than you can handle rankles me to no end.

Overall impression: It's clear to this reader the author suffered a loss in their life and needed to stop carrying all the pent-up emotion inside. The song lyrics were relatable and flowed smoothly from beginning to end.
Sadly the ending is right on... it happens every day, somewhere there's some one in pain.

I hope you're still trying.

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What does the Fox say?????


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .