"Game of Thrones"  "The Iron Bank of Braavos" 



Hi Taylianna

My name is Lyn, I am one of the sly foxes.

Title: Broken

First Impression: I noted this was written 19 years ago, this reader is hoping the author's life has found the peace it needed.

What needs your attention: Free form was chosen by the author and thus it doesn't require any specific line count or stanza repeats. But this author did find the short abrupt lines didn't serve the author as well as longer lines in a free-style prose poem would.

What part I liked best: I thought it was interesting how the author chose to add 4-01-2005 at the bottom of each stanza which is also their anniversary on WDC. There must be some significance to the connection.
My favorite stanza is What have You Done to Me. I could envision myself seeing the situation through the author's eyes and relive my own destructive relationship. My first marriage was to a very abusive man with a child involved.

Overall impression: I wondered why the author chose to make all the sentences short. This could easily be a prose poem and the longer lines would deliver more impact than having the reader pause so frequently.
Thank you for sharing a difficult time with us. May you always have peace in your life.

The views and opinions on this review are mainly the things discovered by the reader and therefore, do not reflect necessarily to the group, activity and/or event being affiliated herein. This is only the opinion and suggestions of the reviewer and it is still up to the author of this piece to consider this review as a corrective action or otherwise. Thank you for allowing me to read your work. It has been my pleasure.


What does the Fox say?????


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .