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Fire to Ashes Open in new Window. [13+]
A dark to light story
by Joy Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Joy Author Icon,

This review is a part of "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. [13+]. *Smile*

Overall Impression:

This is a very interesting story, dear Joy. It is mysterious and reflective. It also leaves some room for interpretation, which I enjoyed.

I think most of us can relate to wishing for an existence of love and peace, free of pain and anxiety, where all of our wishes come true - whatever they may be. For most of us this remains a hope - something to be found one day, if we are fortunate, after our life here on this planet. Others are more willing to take matters into their own hands - no matter how drastic these actions might be.

If you are so inclined, you are vulnerable to false promises. That is what happens to the main character of the story. He allowed himself to be deceived, and he pays for it many times over...

As said, this is very interesting and inspired. A good read!

Suggestions:

I do have a couple of suggestions, dear Joy. I hope that you will find them helpful!

Paragraph 2:

*Snow2* as if it was the enemy

'was' should be were.

Paragraph 3:

*Snow2* shining of iridescent

'of' should be with.

My Rating:

This is a creative piece, offering food for thought. I enjoyed the read.

I did have a couple of suggestions, but nothing major. Therefore, I will give this item a rating of 4.5 out of 5.

Thank you for sharing your work.

Write on!

Kit

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